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    dots Submission Name: Gorgeousdots
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    Author: JanePlane
    ASL Info:    125/F/everyplane
    Elite Ratio:    6.76 - 415/433/130
    Words: 110
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 313
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    dotsGorgeousdots
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    I do know her
    or I did

    not as a man does
    but as only another woman can

    her legs
    taught and taut
    the soft inner part of her thigh
    that never touched when she walked
    the flat of her belly holding a tiny meaty pooch
    she rested smooth fingers on to laugh
    the pout of her lips when
    she smiled, Jameson strait up

    never crying
    no matter how many holes
    she bore into herself

    cigarette on the stoop
    taking smoke in like a lover
    or outside a cafe
    bar
    diner

    maybe in the rain
    or the pale light of spring morning

    gorgeous




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      I like this one the couple of times i've read it. That's information, for you. I think I'll wait and see what reviews turn up before i... meaning: i sense there is more here & that is excellent and relevant.

    i'm not trying to hit you with subliminal messaging, it's more that santi understood your sardonic poem better than i had originally and someone else will come along and the same will probably be the case here. at which point i might chip in and say something useful.

    anyway, i like it.

    | Posted on 2012-02-12 00:00:00 | by Daniel Barlow | [ Reply to This ]
      and the story continues....

    had this feeling about the first piece that maybe this kind of relationship was implied--or even the thought of one...

    i am waiting for part three....

    "never crying" wow...somewhere deep in there is still a heart, beating...but she is determined to not feel, just go through the motions...it is the only way to survive.

    jacob
    | Posted on 2012-02-12 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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