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    dots Submission Name: because you told medots
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    Author: in shadow
    ASL Info:    22/F/ nightmares
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 581/277/103
    Words: 153
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsbecause you told medots
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    I am sitting in my bathroom
    that smells like Irish Spring.
    Iím going away to become beautiful...
    like summer camp
    Iíll send you post cards
    with things like ďhaving a great timeĒ and ďwish you were hereĒ
    weíll stay up late
    talking on the phone, sharing secrets in the dark
    Iíll write terrible poems like we were lovers
    and you wont care because know
    they have to be about someone
    Iíll come back when Iím nearly gone.
    Youíll have to protect me
    Iíll hide behind you like a shadow
    I donít know how to be beautiful
    my body talks without my consent
    Iím coming home like a loaded gun
    with no safety
    Iím terrified
    Iím sitting on the floor of my bath room
    trying to pull myself together
    to put on my war paint
    to pretend Iím a badass
    until the ink sinks in like a new tattoo




    Submitted on 2012-02-12 14:55:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This is a great poem! I love the whole idea of it!
    | Posted on 2012-02-22 00:00:00 | by madsmurph99 | [ Reply to This ]
      hi i dont no what to say other than this was a beauty for me it paints two different pictures
    i really like the desperation of the thots you provoke to the reader like i said this was really good read and a beauty write

    congrats sandman
    | Posted on 2012-02-16 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]


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