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    dots Submission Name: Rememberdots
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    Author: Realitywarp87
    ASL Info:    25/M/FL
    Elite Ratio:    3.1 - 27/53/63
    Words: 267
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 679
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    Description:
       This is inspired by the book & film 'Dream Boy' as well as the song featured in the film titled 'Remember' by Richard Buckner. The film tells the story of Nathan and Roy's budding romance. This poem is written from Roy's perspective.


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    dotsRememberdots
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    Remember the first time I saw your face
    As I smiled and waved hello?
    You were on your way home from church
    Your eyes on me would not let go

    That same sweet smile you showed me
    On the bus as we headed to school
    Your naive look, and boyish charm
    It struck me like a fool

    Remember when you touched my hand
    And at first I pulled away?
    I never told you how suprised I was
    That my prayers were answered that day.

    Your hand on mine was heaven
    The softness of your touch
    I never wanted anyone, ever
    As I wanted you so much

    Remember when you'd watch me
    Through the window of your room?
    Each night I saw you up above
    Your face on mine would loom

    We snuck out one night, together
    To the woods was our intent
    In a graveyard is where we ended
    And our first kiss there was spent

    Remember when we went to the lake,
    knowing that you couldn't swim?
    I told you that I'd teach you
    And that next time you'll go in

    We hiked, and camped, and fooled around
    Told stories by the fire
    Your eyes intently fixed on mine
    Noticing I was your one and only desire

    Remember how in love we were?
    Always together, right by my side
    Even though we are now parted
    You live on with me inside

    And as I remember you
    My vision could never fade away
    You were the boy who filled my dreams
    In my heart and mind you'll stay




    Submitted on 2012-02-14 19:43:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This was a wonderful write. I loved the repetition of "Remember......?" in every other stanza. My favorite lines were:
    "Your eyes intently fixed on mine
    Noticing I was your one and only desire"
    The only thing I would say tell you to improve this poem is that it could use more punctuation. That would just make it more clear to read. Other than that, I enjoyed it very much : )

    </3 Lisa
    | Posted on 2012-02-14 00:00:00 | by 777sacrites777 | [ Reply to This ]


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