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    dots Submission Name: blindeddots
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    Author: AngelinDisguise
    ASL Info:    23/F/AUS
    Elite Ratio:    2.23 - 133/171/100
    Words: 207
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    I'm blinded by the light,
    blinded by the world around me.
    lost in a page of words that no one will ever read.
    i sit here in the moon light looking upon the stars,
    waiting, searching, hoping, i wonder where you are!
    years have come and gone since Ive seen you little face, yet these days that are upon me take me back to our secret place.
    i lost some one today, someone i didn't really know,
    and i sit here wondering what my life has to show?
    i may be a mummy now but so was i before
    the baby girl i used to love is today no more.
    with each passing moment i sit and wonder why,
    why is it fair to live this way when life becomes a lie.
    a brief pause in my writing as the tears begin to fall
    I'm reminded of the fateful night when your life had left the world.
    its been a long time since Ive cried for you as i ask myself why,
    why did i not save you, protect you with my life?
    im blinded by the light and the choices that ive made.
    for each day i am breathing your living in a grave




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