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    Author: Oracle
    ASL Info:    24/ F /NY
    Elite Ratio:    4.63 - 423/313/46
    Words: 26
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    The tears they come
    The silence rings in symphony
    Sadness wars within
    The circumference of sound surrounding
    The dismissal of a day




    Submitted on 2012-02-15 06:54:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this feels like depression.

    not that i suffer from it on a regular basis, but when i have had my bluer moments... yea, these words sound out like i have felt.

    'Sadness wars within' - yup, it's something like that.

    too, i love the idea of 'silence rings in symphony'.

    anyhoo...

    just some thoughts on yours.
    | Posted on 2012-02-16 00:00:00 | by isabella | [ Reply to This ]


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