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Author: Oracle
ASL Info:    24/ F /NY
Elite Ratio:    4.63 - 423 /313 /46
Words: 26
Class/Type: Poetry /Depressed
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The tears they come
The silence rings in symphony
Sadness wars within
The circumference of sound surrounding
The dismissal of a day

Submitted on 2012-02-15 06:54:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  this feels like depression.

not that i suffer from it on a regular basis, but when i have had my bluer moments... yea, these words sound out like i have felt.

'Sadness wars within' - yup, it's something like that.

too, i love the idea of 'silence rings in symphony'.


just some thoughts on yours.
| Posted on 2012-02-16 00:00:00 | by isabella | [ Reply to This ]

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