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    dots Submission Name: Speaking dust dots

    Author: Clayman
    ASL Info:    28 - getting late
    Elite Ratio:    6.34 - 609/327/167
    Words: 113
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsSpeaking dust dots

    Draw me from Your archetype,
    a sailboat graced by infinity's root to
    beckon rest to mused thoughts and
    ancient promises grown on the wind.

    Grace Your breath upon swollen dreams,
    I am replete with feathered knowings,
    readied by time's scythe of finality to
    return to the molder of all that becomes me.

    Entice me, to release sleepy owls pressed unjust,
    to fall upwards as reversed rain unto Your golden reign.
    Fill my veins with paintings serene,
    carve from me a cloud of triumph to freeze false offerings.

    Carry me in Your hem to re-generate time unspent,
    teach me the forgotten ways of being born again.


    Submitted on 2012-02-15 13:27:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Some very nice mystical elements but a little clustered, particularly in the first stanza. Good instinct shown with "time's scythe of finality" whereby some may complain that the guy with the scythe is "Death" or the grim reaper instead of "Time" but harking back to archetypes thing, whether the tall skinny guy in the hood is carrying an hourglass or a scythe, it's still boiling down to be the angel of death aka Azrael in another guise by my way of thinking.

    Maybe it's just me but many will have a hard time finding meaning except as to snippets, but the important thing is always what it means to you. There seems a lot of the "story" missing or yet to be told, perhaps this is worthy of some additional lines to guide us readers along. Owls are good.
    | Posted on 2012-02-15 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]

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