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    dots Submission Name: Towne of Charlesdots

    Author: Anneboleyn707
    ASL Info:    18/Female/Pennsylvania
    Elite Ratio:    3.96 - 44/84/67
    Words: 140
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nostalgia
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    dotsTowne of Charlesdots

    By: Jamie Redlawsk

    The sun glints calmly

    Towards cars and creaking busses.

    Painted. Peculiar. Green.

    Attempts to merge the modern fumes

    With dead southern belles;

    In their sumptuous estate rooms.

    Tarrying behind tawny oblong fountains,

    Just inside the split of cobblestones,

    The warbling birds twitter

    In dewy staccato parks

    Palm trees scrape the widening width

    Of calm coral dawn,

    A centennials dream

    Demanding pause from anyone

    Tenacious as the falling humidity.

    In the towne of a Charles

    Hitherto seen his day,

    There go cycling contraptions and tiny housewives,

    The backdrop’s swarthy cabarets,

    Some rarity of rains

    Trickle inland over such alive.

    Petitioning past the Revolution:

    “Flourish and survive”

    Submitted on 2012-02-15 13:52:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I really liked the picture you've painted here of this Charles('?) Towne. I put the parenthesis in because I'm still pondering if the town is named Charles or if it's, as you said, Charles' town. And I love the fact that it could possibly go both ways. You also have a very extensive vocabulary, and here I thought I was good with words. I had to look some up for clarification. I love the description and detail in every line, it really makes the poem stand out. Definitely one of my favorites now. Thanks for sharing :)
    | Posted on 2012-02-16 00:00:00 | by Realitywarp87 | [ Reply to This ]

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