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    dots Submission Name: You... and I...dots

    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/623/381
    Words: 261
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Depressed
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       About my step dad who is now serving time for these things nevertheless the pain is still very real..

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    dotsYou... and I...dots

    Where did I go during those long weary nights
    Where did I pretend I was...
    How was I capable of leaving my present being
    Using all my might to ignore your cold, dirty, rough hands all over me
    I drifted off into never-never land
    Where we all roamed free and heavenly like...
    Imagined a world where I was someone's daddy's little girl and he never made me feel so ...
    Forever... A broken spirt, a washed up girl...
    Still I secretly hoped I can be someone's little girl..
    Still I remember those nights

    You stole my childhood
    Stole my innocents
    You took the one thing you had no right to take...
    Yet you did with so much confidence, so much pride
    You even engulfed my body within yours as my own mother watched
    How much of a real man are you now?
    Then again how much is she a real mother?

    Cheated out of having two loving parents,
    I was
    A childhood wrongfully stolen from me,
    It was
    Nevertheless what eats away at me the most,
    Reoccurring nightmares you have so gladly given me
    The Post Traumatic Stress Disorder
    A life of instant untrustworthiness of others, because you so badly betrayed me
    I still live with the choices you choose to make.. With My Life
    The actions you accepted to take. Concerning My Life

    I am STILL affected

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      ....the pain you have lived with.. the betrayal, the stolen innocence...all of them were undeserving.. you were a child, it was their job to protect, to love, to nuture, to teach...NEVER to do or allow what was done..
    , and the answers and justice you need, sadly you may never find..

    Great write,raw and as always emotionally charged..keep writting..it does help.
    | Posted on 2012-02-23 00:00:00 | by trynfinity | [ Reply to This ]
      This is the most raw, personal piece i have ever read on this site. While not technically the most sound, it envoked some strong emotions - and it will to everyone who reads it. That should be the goal. Kudos to you, and sorry you had to go through that.
    | Posted on 2012-02-20 00:00:00 | by hybridsongwrite | [ Reply to This ]
      as much as i went somewhere else on those nights...part of me was still there...and now, that part of me remembers and remembers and remembers---

    you stole a part of me i will never get back...

    | Posted on 2012-02-16 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]

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