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    dots Submission Name: Angel on Earthdots
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    Author: RamiroTitus
    ASL Info:    20, Male, Turlock Ca
    Elite Ratio:    0.01 - 0/0/5
    Words: 164
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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    Description:
       This is a poem to that one Girl we All have let get Away!!


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    dotsAngel on Earthdots
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    There's an angel on Earth, I know her by name
    I once held her hand
    As she expressed to me her pain
    To what she said, I will not disclose
    but just know this
    She's more perfect than the reddest rose
    More beautiful than the setting sun
    and when she is angry
    She is more deadly than a loaded gun!
    Oh how i long to be in her company once again
    But like a typical male
    I committed man's greatest sin
    I left her scorned
    With no thoughts but my own
    and like a QB under pressure
    I fumbled in the Zone!
    People like to doubt
    and say angels are not real
    But I've seen one with my eyes
    and my fingers..... they still feel
    Her lightly colored skin
    I knew right away
    She was not from the world of men
    She has to be from above
    Cuz god put her in my life
    To show me i can still LOVE!!




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