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    dots Submission Name: Ozone has been shotdots
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    Author: Temidayo
    ASL Info:    29 male Nigeria-lagos
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 161/40/20
    Words: 158
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 320
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1027



    Description:
       Our path to self annihilation


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    Ozone has been shot
    sky weeps
    lay a hand,even you can feel earth's quaking
    science says its just a flesh wound
    nothing eternal.
    But look and you will see our bite marks on mother nature's nipples
    Ingrates we are!

    Our effects are two fold;boomerang and ripples.

    Ozone has been shot
    night is mourning
    Our need for a fag sent billows of smoke into the unborn yet in its 1st trimester
    Our gay and bi-laws were bye laws to sanity.
    Because we seeked friendship for tweety and slyvester
    Our reasonings were never down to earth
    but suspended in gravity.

    We made Nature our Study,but never studied Nature,
    Our Corrections are worse than the mistakes that earned us a low mark
    Tsunami and heat waves more than any life could bear to see
    Pictures of polar bears, Oca and shark
    extinct as we are bound to be.

    Ozone has been shot
    Now the world is hot!




    Submitted on 2012-02-17 05:02:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Hi there. I agree with jacoberin and relate to his comms. Well done nice piece. Take care. jm
    | Posted on 2012-02-28 00:00:00 | by Joachim | [ Reply to This ]
      this piece is full of very smart philosophy and truth...

    i especially like the first stanza...and the play on words..."science says it's just a flesh wound"

    good bit there...get the apostrophe in "it's"

    and then the bit about mother nature's nipples...nice--the bite marks..

    yes, boomerangs and ripples...how true--

    like the tweety and sylvester part...

    it should be "sought" not "seeked"--but a clever wordplay there too...

    we destroy...and enough flesh wounds and the quantitive effect will be devastating...

    we need to care

    jacob
    | Posted on 2012-02-17 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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