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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/378
    Words: 154
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    A world you can live in between the black and white is unimaginable
    Your narcissistic personality gets in the way of your personal relationships,
    however this does not phase you

    Like pawns on a chest board move us all as you wish

    Answers likes "not sure, maybe and we'll see" aggravate you
    For the uncertainty is too much to bear

    In your narcissistic little world there are no shaded area's of life
    the color gray does not exists

    Therefore you beat yourself into the ground believing you'll always be 3 steps ahead of everyone else
    Tell yourself you do not miss people
    Only miss what the relationship provided for you..

    Keep telling yourself that if you must,
    Nevertheless, you can officially take my chess piece off your game board of life
    I am no longer willing or wanting to be a pawn in your "game of life"




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      i love this piece (no pun intended)

    but this is life...a chess board, the moves, different strategies...there is never one way to play things, and life is not black and white...

    no certainty...lots of gray area...i try to impress that upon my students..."don't be judgemental, it's easy from the outside looking in, but it's not so easy from inside--many decisions and choices are not clear cut"

    i could never live in a world of black and white...and have rebelled against it since i was a child.

    jacob
    | Posted on 2012-02-17 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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