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    dots Submission Name: Black Magicdots
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    Author: black_beauty18
    ASL Info:    25/Female/Hutchinson, KS
    Elite Ratio:    4.04 - 153/146/46
    Words: 83
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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    dotsBlack Magicdots
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    I wasn't prepared for your spell,
    You cast it deep and snared me well.
    You must be the Prince of the Night,
    With eyes that speak of dark delight.
    Those lips that deeply drink my soul,
    Strong hands that rob me of control.
    The very air I breathe-- for you.
    Your every wicked wish, I'll do.
    I'm weak against your evil charm,
    My heart resists my brain's alarm.
    If this is Hell, I'll live in sin,
    If this is death, kill me again.




    Submitted on 2012-02-17 20:58:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      reminds me of an old song.."if lovin' you is wrong, i don't want to be right"

    i like this..especially the "lips drinking my soul part"----

    quite magic in its honesty ...the lines are pretty straightforward, but so nicely worded...

    jacob
    | Posted on 2012-02-18 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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