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    dots Submission Name: Bloomdots

    Author: JanePlane
    ASL Info:    125/F/everyplane
    Elite Ratio:    6.76 - 415/433/130
    Words: 44
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       to see the time lapse photos go to: http://www.flickr.com/photos/yellowcloud/3931605460/in/set-72157622437585094/

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    this living stone
    its own poem
    bursts vibrance forth from
    some grey-blue slit
    and split
    gains momentum
    grasping sun's rays.

    gasping for breath
    you marvel at the life

    It is life

    a soft cadence;
    something akin to love.

    Submitted on 2012-02-21 14:24:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I responded well to the summing-up: "Something akin to love".

    I was writing for myself some atheist mysticism; you have those same thoughts. Your poems are sometimes hardly considerable, and this is a lightweight one, but I guess it was just made for me.
    | Posted on 2012-07-02 00:00:00 | by Glen Bowman | [ Reply to This ]
    I had to marvel over the time-lapse clip for awhile before I even read your poem. I have to get one of those Lithops flowers. Got to. That is the coolest bit of nature I've seen in a while. So first off thank you for that!

    This kind of reminds me too of when you see a wildflower that has grown through cement, just that breathtaking reality that something can survive through anything & by any means. It's often those things that we perceive as fragile that surprise us with their strength the most - like flowers, like love.

    Your descriptions are lovely & the conclusion is spot on. I did trip up a little here

    "you marvel at the life

    it is life"

    but I have the feeling that perhaps I am not reading it properly. It's a little early in the morning here & I'm only allowed so much coffee. :)

    Also, I think the "its own poem" at the beginning is too obvious. The poem itself is already saying that without saying it, you know? Just some thoughts.

    Always a pleasure!
    | Posted on 2012-02-25 00:00:00 | by Santi | [ Reply to This ]
      a stone softens--

    many of us have become hardened by relationships that haven't worked out...but there is hope...sometimes life changes, and love comes to us when unexpected...

    and the sun shines on us, softens us--there is a slit, a split...and we open back up...

    i like soft stones..i like this poem..

    i am a hardened poem who has been softened...i relate

    | Posted on 2012-02-21 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]

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