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    dots Submission Name: heart painsdots

    Author: RamiroTitus
    ASL Info:    20, Male, Turlock Ca
    Elite Ratio:    0.01 - 0/0/5
    Words: 242
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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       This goes to the woman that left me with not only a broken heart but a broken pride..

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    dotsheart painsdots

    My pierced heart fills my cup with blood
    As i part my lips to drink bitterness is all i taste
    She's poisoned it with her lies
    Three years we just waste
    To my heart she holds the key
    Many have tried to break the lock
    but none will ever succeed
    For only she has what i need
    She's my personal drug
    and i her fein
    My heart aches for the love she once showed
    for it was more precious to me
    than earthly silver or gold
    She once said long ago
    "I'll leave who ever i'm with
    just to marry you."
    My heart streaks with pain
    just knowing it's not true
    I was her Mero
    She was my Jess
    My fingers tear at my skin
    for the pain in my chest
    Oh how i wish this was all just a nightmare
    that maybe one day i'll wake up
    and I'll find her right there
    just lying at my side
    that beautiful young lady
    who was always down to ride
    She owned my Pablo
    and i owned the Pearl
    I was her man
    and she was my girl
    Now our time together
    it was a dream
    the day i woke up
    is when i watched her leave
    I try my hardest to go back to sleep
    and back to where we first started
    but now I'm stuck in this world
    Where she's left me BROKEN HEARTED

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