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    dots Submission Name: As Everdots

    Author: krs3332003
    Elite Ratio:    6.47 - 144/114/64
    Words: 86
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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       Have you ever passed by someone...and thought...what if? An entire lifetime lived in a simple glance...and after the moment passes by, you remain unchanged and unscathed.

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    dotsAs Everdots

    Glancing eyes
    An innocent stir
    Kissing souls
    Forever to burn

    Distant truths
    Temptation calls
    Wanted feelings
    To hold on tight

    Chances come
    And chances go
    Romance beckons
    The heart awakens

    Yet nothing more
    Of time to answer
    For moments end
    Upon request

    In other places
    In each other's arms
    Let nothing more
    Become of tears

    Prayers are heard
    So earnestly
    Forget me not
    Each breath you take

    Such as it is
    Nothing as it was
    Yet you remain
    As ever...

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      wanted feelings we are often afraid to want.

    baggage claims our hearts...we lock ourselves in the plane's lav.

    but then...someone real, someone solid...someone with a heart not to break other hearts comes along...

    and we retake our seat by the window..and look out at what is possible, if we let ourselves love again..

    oh well. sorry for the rant..but this poem sparked something in me...

    recent history..i attached to this piece
    really liked the flight it took me on.

    | Posted on 2012-02-24 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]

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