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    dots Submission Name: Silent Auctiondots

    Author: krs3332003
    Elite Ratio:    6.47 - 144/114/64
    Words: 36
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       Sometimes, we need to read between the lines to understand life. If things appear confusing, as they should be, try reversing them. But as it is often said, "Things aren't always black & white." Only a few can really see...

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    dotsSilent Auctiondots

    come to me
    we drift away
    it all begins
    i wonder why
    for our sins
    for our flight
    tempted by fate
    ignorant of guilt
    you will understand

    Submitted on 2012-02-25 15:37:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i agree with lloyd...smooth piece and the end leaves open to interpretation...either you will understand or you won't ....could go either way---

    doubtless it will...

    "it all begins naturally"

    but will it end the same way?

    as long as there is understanding..it will be okay.

    | Posted on 2012-02-27 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
      I like the structure and key words projected in this. It moves although seems a little open ended which could benefit the reader to go where he/she wishes with it. Thoughtful.
    | Posted on 2012-02-25 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]

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