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Danny Boy's Demise (1975-2017)

Author: krs3332003
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For me, this poem is about the sign of the times. For some, it is a controversial piece, but that's okay. The message is clear, for those that would read and understand...

Danny Boy's Demise (1975-2017)

And there they sleep
so silently
His hopes and dreams
for Life
Yet deep inside
the pain runs deep
How he suffers
with that wound

Oh Danny Boy
Just take my hand
And end your suffering

He ponders rules
and how to escape
It's the words
that give him strength

But the voice keeps calling
Oh Danny Boy
It's time to go
Come dance along
With ME

Torn and empty
he watches them
In slumber's hold
they seem frail
But forgiveness
is their strength
How he wishes
he could be
simply more like them

And then that music
calls to him
His mired eyes
wide shut

Oh Danny Boy
I've come for YOU
Come rest dear boy
Come rest with ME

With open eyes
he sees his end
hanging from above
His savior's arms
in cold embrace
begging for release

Oh Danny Boy
Come closer still
Let me hold
You tight

He steps into
the rising depths
and takes the flaxen rope
'round his neck
he wraps it
and stands to wait
his cue

Oh Danny Boy
Oh Danny Boy
I've watched you
All your life
Sweet boy
Fall to ME
I'll catch you
I promise eternally

One last breath
is drawn inside
He steps beyond
and down
Like a leaf
in the wind
he tumbles away
but something
stops him short

I've got you
Oh Danny Boy
I've got you
Now rest
Your weary head...

Submitted on 2012-02-26 08:18:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Just for the record, "theludus" is an alias of "Daniel Barlow"...or is "Daniel Barlow" an alias of "theludus"? This is like a bad episode of Mission Impossible.
| Posted on 2012-02-28 00:00:00 | by krs3332003 | [ Reply to This ]
  i don't think this works but, i'll tell you what would work. the slow torture of more
of your poetry.

| Posted on 2012-02-26 00:00:00 | by theludus | [ Reply to This ]
  Sad. This sounds to me like the extreme of self destruction that comes listening to inner voices. As in when a person seems to fail in everything and death seems to be a good excuse and suicide a quick option. If I am right its the battle many today fight. Even I fought that battle. How did I win? Poetry became my hideout. A world where I alternate between good and better. Where I ...its a good piece like an opera. But the fat lady doesnt sing at the end,she wails. Thanks for postin
| Posted on 2012-02-26 00:00:00 | by Temidayo | [ Reply to This ]

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