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    dots Submission Name: Danny Boy's Demise (1975-2017)dots
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    Author: krs3332003
    Elite Ratio:    6.45 - 142/113/63
    Words: 249
    Class/Type: Story/Misc
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    Description:
       For me, this poem is about the sign of the times. For some, it is a controversial piece, but that's okay. The message is clear, for those that would read and understand...


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    dotsDanny Boy's Demise (1975-2017)dots
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    And there they sleep
    so silently
    His hopes and dreams
    for Life
    Yet deep inside
    the pain runs deep
    How he suffers
    with that wound

    Oh Danny Boy
    Just take my hand
    And end your suffering

    He ponders rules
    and how to escape
    It's the words
    that give him strength

    But the voice keeps calling
    Oh Danny Boy
    It's time to go
    Come dance along
    With ME

    Torn and empty
    he watches them
    In slumber's hold
    they seem frail
    But forgiveness
    is their strength
    How he wishes
    he could be
    simply more like them

    And then that music
    calls to him
    His mired eyes
    wide shut

    Oh Danny Boy
    I've come for YOU
    Come rest dear boy
    Come rest with ME

    With open eyes
    he sees his end
    hanging from above
    His savior's arms
    in cold embrace
    begging for release

    Oh Danny Boy
    Come closer still
    Let me hold
    You tight

    He steps into
    the rising depths
    and takes the flaxen rope
    'round his neck
    he wraps it
    and stands to wait
    his cue

    Oh Danny Boy
    Oh Danny Boy
    I've watched you
    All your life
    Sweet boy
    Fall to ME
    I'll catch you
    I promise eternally

    One last breath
    is drawn inside
    He steps beyond
    and down
    Like a leaf
    in the wind
    he tumbles away
    but something
    stops him short

    I've got you
    Oh Danny Boy
    I've got you
    Now rest
    Your weary head...




    Submitted on 2012-02-26 08:18:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Just for the record, "theludus" is an alias of "Daniel Barlow"...or is "Daniel Barlow" an alias of "theludus"? This is like a bad episode of Mission Impossible.
    | Posted on 2012-02-28 00:00:00 | by krs3332003 | [ Reply to This ]
      i don't think this works but, i'll tell you what would work. the slow torture of more
    of your poetry.



    | Posted on 2012-02-26 00:00:00 | by theludus | [ Reply to This ]
      Sad. This sounds to me like the extreme of self destruction that comes listening to inner voices. As in when a person seems to fail in everything and death seems to be a good excuse and suicide a quick option. If I am right its the battle many today fight. Even I fought that battle. How did I win? Poetry became my hideout. A world where I alternate between good and better. Where I ...its a good piece like an opera. But the fat lady doesnt sing at the end,she wails. Thanks for postin
    | Posted on 2012-02-26 00:00:00 | by Temidayo | [ Reply to This ]


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