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    dots Submission Name: What do you see?dots
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    Author: krs3332003
    Elite Ratio:    6.45 - 142/113/63
    Words: 70
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Description:
       Just like the title says, whay do you see?


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    dotsWhat do you see?dots
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    Caught between worlds
    One of Shadow
    Another of Luminance

    Immersed in blue

    From rocky terrain
    Simplicity does grow
    Arranged by happenstance

    Swaying arms subdue

    Thoughts that swirled
    Challenged to remain

    Follow to touch
    On hallowed ground
    Unseen by all

    Soaring from afar

    Brilliance of fire
    Memories are found
    Dreams that fall

    A shooting star

    Given so much
    With hopeful desire




    Submitted on 2012-02-28 07:09:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Not good at riddles, if this is one, but I so like the imagery of every line and I felt as if I were on a high ridge in mountains, about sundown. That is rare and skilful, the evokation.
    | Posted on 2012-02-28 00:00:00 | by Glen Bowman | [ Reply to This ]
      I see being burnt out, although you (or it) held so much promise. That shady area in between where the light does not strike nor does the darkness consume...the chance to explode never comes, if it does it is total happenstance. Thats what I see, i am no regards a pro at this, lol, take care

    Brent
    | Posted on 2012-02-28 00:00:00 | by austin | [ Reply to This ]


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