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    Author: isabella
    Elite Ratio:    5.56 - 803/905/472
    Words: 124
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       was at a friend's house this weekend and IMAGINE was hanging over her sliding doors. reminded me of this.

    and still... i continue to imagine. for whatever that's worth.


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    dotsuntitled #29dots
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    i remember walking past a sign that said: imagine.
    i wrote to you about it once.


    imagine me wearing a me-smile
    looking at you wearing a you-smile
    talkinbout everything over the sun
    and how dew is cold on the feet.
    knees touch for the first time
    under a blank canvas over coffee and eggs
    and i am fascinated by your ability
    to find the pieces of me that matter.
    or, maybe it is that you make them matter;
    like an alter ego sayin' all is well with the world.
    you have a calming effect. i can be who i am,
    who i am, and you don't flinch.
    yes. imagine.







    Submitted on 2012-02-28 08:37:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    I read this aloud and love how conversational it sounds, to the audience, like how easy it should be between two friends or two lovers.

    It's so smooth, I have no critique to offer. Everything's perfect.

    Alia
    | Posted on 2012-02-29 00:00:00 | by O | [ Reply to This ]
      beautiful piece of writing....

    if i can be who i am with you...then we will work---two individuals only make a good pair if they are able to stay who they are.

    well penned.

    jacob
    | Posted on 2012-02-28 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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