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    dots Submission Name: who the fuck knows dots

    Author: joezwells
    Elite Ratio:    3.81 - 64/78/54
    Words: 216
    Class/Type: Misc/Venting
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       i was told that god only gives you as much as you can handle...really? i think i had enough

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    dotswho the fuck knows dots

    to say life is tough would be to easy
    saying its unfair is true but not blunt enough
    saying its a game is just not right

    the time that we are given is too hard to enjoy

    the time that we have wasted do we really want back
    are mistakes really learned from if they are repeated with no control
    does time really heal or does it open the wond even more

    to bleed with regret is said to be a life wasted
    but what if its the only thing that makes you feel real

    to be put in a place where nothing is familiar is like making you crawl over broken glass
    the hardships you face are harder to overcome
    the lessons you learned before seem pointless
    you cant apply them to this date and time
    time moves slower than the minute before
    just getting up becomes the days biggest chore
    you reach for door to get on with your day
    but your mind tells you no, it convinces you to stay

    why go away when you already are
    your already bleeding why make the wond deeper
    this is a scar you can do without
    a wrinkle in time so difficult you would rather rule it out

    Submitted on 2012-02-28 09:00:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Oh for petesake dude, do you live in Darfur? You ought to be like me: I have had the most amazing good luck all my life and have nearly been happy several times. I put it down to clean living and the substance I smoke, but others have told me I am insensitive.

    This poem is what I call a theme, because out of it you could get several more artificial poems by finding metaphors for parts of this one.

    But a lot of poets would disagree with me and go raw is best.

    Metaphors? I was just thinking that you have a lot of wounding going on in there. Now, maybe (like the crawling over broken glass) there is more to be made of that figure, in more than one way, if you could think of some even more bizarre self-tortures without coming to approve of them like some idiots do! An original figure is like a green diamond, you don't see many of them, even around here!
    | Posted on 2012-02-28 00:00:00 | by Glen Bowman | [ Reply to This ]

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