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Author: joezwells
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you ever had those days where everything, im mean every little thing that could possibly go wrong does? well i have been having those for the last 2months non stop

time time time

this place im in is to foreign for me
these challenges im faced with are breaking me
its not the big picture, its all thats inbetween
the minute to minute, the second to second.
over coming an hour is a vicotory
but the next is a slap in the face with another obsticle
its an illusion if you will
it all looks as if its falling in to place
then a minute passes and its all misplaced
time is against us
its the enemy in my case
hiding in every corner is chaos and confusion
is this just the time for it all to go to hell
will this slowly end
only time will tell

Submitted on 2012-02-28 09:09:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Ah, no; I am a very old man and can tell you that it will not end. Once I suicided but they sent me back, they reckoned I was overqualified. You simply cannot win.

You seem to be one of those fortunate souls who spell worse than the spellchecker, except that I think "obsticle" is better than the official version "obstacle". Maybe it could be "obstickal" even better.

Well, it's fortunate if the spellchecker is any use to one, I mean.

| Posted on 2012-02-28 00:00:00 | by Glen Bowman | [ Reply to This ]
  nice dude, I like the line where you said is this the time for it to go to hell, it's like anticipation for the shit hitting the fan, lol. Thats how it feels most of the time unfortunately. I think that if the person stays on top of the shit it won't build so fast, haha, anyway dude nice work here, take care

| Posted on 2012-02-28 00:00:00 | by austin | [ Reply to This ]

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