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    dots Submission Name: Perishdots
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    Author: Latin King
    ASL Info:    31/M/Los Angeles
    Elite Ratio:    2.39 - 104/232/145
    Words: 151
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    Description:
       Just expressing my experiences that I'm going through right now.


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    dotsPerishdots
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    As I sit alone at home,
    With few hopes shown,
    And,
    With everyone in my life gone,
    I tend to imagine I'm a clone,
    With no will to move on.

    Yet I still rise from my misery,
    Bury my pride deep inside of me,
    And cover my vision,
    Just so my eyes won't see;
    What a violent atmosphere,
    This life appears to be.

    And so I move on,
    Leaving the past way behind,
    And with every stressed line,
    I try to escape this dark abiss,
    Hoping I could find,
    Something that,
    I might have missed.

    So I procede with my pain,
    And prepare for the kill,
    And as I grow up,
    I know for a fact,
    Things would never have the same feel.

    So I fall,
    And know that this pain is real;
    Yet my lesson is to get up,
    Move on,
    And not perish,
    At will.




    Submitted on 2004-08-01 17:33:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i enjoyed reading this poem because i have the same emotions right now..it's good that you expressed it in your poem 'cause it's really hard for me to do it...nice job
    meh,
    jen
    | Posted on 2004-08-01 00:00:00 | by jeniecel | [ Reply to This ]
      i think you are on the right track. This poem deals with most of the depressed people out there who try but fail (I can be one of them also). I feel the same experience sometimes happening with me.
    | Posted on 2004-08-01 00:00:00 | by sjayant | [ Reply to This ]


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