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    dots Submission Name: Churchdots
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    Author: bentnotbroken
    ASL Info:    25+/m/middle of nowhere
    Elite Ratio:    4.6 - 351/260/38
    Words: 88
    Class/Type: Poetry/Religious
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    Description:
       just some thoughts really. been seeing this in a lot of churches lately and thought I'd write about it.


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    dotsChurchdots
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    Stained glass eyes behind painted lips
    the fire of faith now only smoldering ashes
    the congregation singing apathetic praise to a god they almost worship
    the sermon-speaker stands and orates
    attempting to speak hope and love into existence
    as the words roll over the audience
    those held captive by duty, habit, or their parents
    no stirring is seen
    the old look to their books for insight
    the young look at their phones for games
    This place is dying
    and the hope of our future with it




    Submitted on 2012-02-29 09:46:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I don't know that the hope of our future dies along with the church., but this is pretty good work.
    | Posted on 2012-03-06 00:00:00 | by joeyalphabet | [ Reply to This ]
      you know, i haven't been to church in forever. part of me feels guilty for it. part of me doesn't.

    this morning i landed on a station and there was a song playing about how God is Holy. i knew the song and sang along with. (put a smile on my face, that.)

    i suppose i worship in my own way. and maybe it was just one song, but somehow it grounded me.

    i do understand this, though. i do.
    almost worship.

    anyhoo...

    just wanted to leave some thoughts on this.
    it's a good piece.
    | Posted on 2012-03-02 00:00:00 | by isabella | [ Reply to This ]


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