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    dots Submission Name: Greeddots
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    Author: keestu
    ASL Info:    32/male/Sydney
    Elite Ratio:    5.61 - 153/95/116
    Words: 176
    Class/Type: Poetry/Betrayal
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    Description:
       Ten reasons of death

    1. Old age
    2. Wrath
    3. solitude
    4. Emptiness
    5. Despair
    6. Destruction
    7. Intoxication
    8. Insanity
    9. Greed
    10. Sacrifice

    Ninth -- Greed
    A perspective of my life where I ask for more in all aspects material as well as personal feelings. I describe it in a manner of superiority as greed also comes in part of inner feelings of a human.


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    dotsGreeddots
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    Cut me through this life as I look around as the world moves too slow....

    I walk past by worthless creatures around me,
    as they do not see that time is killing them.
    As silent as it can be I see more of what is needed,
    in this life of mine bound by laws.

    Smile towards these pathetic fools,
    as they do not see that what they have is not enough.
    Money my dear, money is what rotates this world,
    as time passes by, 'just' with no questions asked.

    More I say, More....on whatever that brings my smile,
    of that on my face which I direly try for.
    Annulled is what my mind is and my heart to beat,
    though I realize that as nothing to satisfy me not.

    My dear materials bound by the same laws,
    I ask is why not my heart that does not satisfy.
    I take a step back just to find myself moving forward,
    For all that I ask as a man with more power asks for......”More”




    Submitted on 2012-03-03 12:51:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Ohh, I hope this is a dramatization of a type you are hereby criticizing as opposed to some personal ideal. After all it is one of the ten reasons of death. I only say this because it is a very personal sounding speaker at work here, nice work on that aspect. All very real. Very good description.

    I think the four-bit word is somewhere on this particular page: http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Narcissistic_personality_disorder



    | Posted on 2012-03-04 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]


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