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    dots Submission Name: Mistress Mavendots

    Author: krs3332003
    Elite Ratio:    6.51 - 146/114/65
    Words: 179
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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       Muses can come from the most unusual of places...

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    dotsMistress Mavendots

    For aptitude in morbid verse
    with lies to them she did coerce
    An aeon's worth of foul intent
    was Mistress Maven's bleak lament

    Don't you wish that they could see
    the truth of your deception
    The empty written words you write
    for spite and misdirection

    Such fervid anguish toils your mind
    of hallowed visions left behind
    Oh Mistress Maven hear our pleas
    for more deceit of stormy seas

    Tranquil senses tell a tale
    that only some can know
    A mask of virtuosity
    from which you would bestow

    You beckon them for clemency
    Your silver-tongue a fantasy
    Mistress Maven shall we dance?
    A malcontent from circumstance

    The delirium of your escape
    can hold the tepid tone
    Behind those eyes the wind subsides
    from tainted words you've sown

    As ghostly shadows gallop by
    they seize the thoughts she must deny
    And Mistress Maven turns to dust
    for chants that broke the sacred trust

    And now to rest and contemplate
    the lessons of this lore
    A respite from her maelstrom
    Dear Mistress Maven, never more

    Submitted on 2012-03-05 11:51:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Again I appreciated the rhyme. Flawless. It this seems like it sort of possesed you, it has that eary supernatural vibe. It also seems personal ( I could be reading my own life and ideas into it) as if your inspiration WS perfectly in tune to an emotion of yours, the writer.

    Really beautifully written. The more I read of yours the more your character and depth of talent are revealed as it should with anyone of note. I hope that your pieces find themselves in their own contemporary collection one day.
    | Posted on 2016-08-14 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]
      I need to find out who Mistress Maven is, if you are citing some character I ought to have read about but didn't. Can't get much out of this piece otherwise. Maybe that is a fault in it, or maybe in me! But it is well written in every way that I enjoy, so this praise is not really so faint as it probably seems!
    | Posted on 2015-05-05 00:00:00 | by Glen Bowman | [ Reply to This ]
      The magic is even more apparent. Yes, and tell her Hi for me also. Kudos K.
    | Posted on 2012-03-05 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]
      You automatically get a 10 point advantage for writing in rhyme. This is somewhat different than the initial version I read, if memory serves. Iinitially said I enjoyed it but found it a little bumpy. This is not and has a little better theme/direction if memory also serves.

    I was also thanking you earlier for giving me a new word of the day: http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Maven
    which it helps to understand to get the full elegance of things. The closing Maven (raven) "never more" is a cute nod to Poe.

    I think it could use an opening stanza added to set the stage, introduce the Mistress, etc. to let us know you are talking to her instead of us, perhaps letting us know a little more about her nature and propensities. I note you did a little of that in the discription which I did not notice earlier. Cool stuff.
    | Posted on 2012-03-05 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]
      This strikes me as a some what morbid nursery rhyme. Just the flow and the rhyming scheme of the whole thing. Though I enjoyed the subject and context within the piece, very gripping.
    | Posted on 2012-03-05 00:00:00 | by DearlyDeparted | [ Reply to This ]

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