Escape to Loss by Iram

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dots

<< | >>

Submission Name: Escape to Loss dots

--------------------------------------------------------

Author:	Iram
ASL Info:	25/F/from your world
Elite Ratio:	2.66 - 50/62/55
Words:	113

Class/Type:	Poetry/Misc
Total Views:	1017
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	832

Description:

Escape to Loss dots

-------------------------------------------

Escaped into the morning sounds
Where a little silence wanders
On the streets..
Where the resting life adds up
A few packs of alive talks
You are alive..
Seeping down in the broken roads
Molten blood of an early day
Not mature..
Than love and its ways
Escaped into the abstracts
In to the words..
Where you freeze the moments
And spend them for ages
Everlasting..
Polishing with your intensity
Your rough and submissive ideas
The legendary..
Picking up verses from the pools
The pools of red alphabets
And salty fluid..
Inserting in the sentences
Pulling out, thursting in, in the roots
Bleeding!
Till the frozen illusions squirt away
Make you dead.

Submitted on 2012-03-05 14:32:41 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

1: >_<
2: I dunno...
3: meh!
4: Pretty cool
5: Wow!

||| Comments |||
i feel the last words coming out of the poet...bleeding him to death...

escaping into the writing, as long as it is there...

escaping into the abstract...abstract makes the reality of life less bloody? less harsh?

we thaw the illusions with our pen...they squirt away and then there is no more..we are figuratively dead.

i also get a feeling in this that the words are like packs of wolves smelling the blood and feeding on us.

in many ways we are ruled by the words as poets...we do not rule them.

jacob
| Posted on 2012-04-08 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]

Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

1. Be honest.
2. Try not to give only compliments.
3. How did it make you feel?
4. Why did it make you feel that way?
5. Which parts?
6. What distracted from the piece? 7. What was unclear?
8. What does it remind you of?
9. How could it be improved?
10. What would you have done differently?
11. What was your interpretation of it?
12. Does it feel original?

194513

Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
It means a lot to them, as it does to you.
Eyes written by homeless
April 1, 2018 written by homeless
'Cause You're Mine, I Walk the Line. written by Torie
Ardent written by saartha
Jar (working title) written by rev.jpfadeproof
Untitled - 8/2017 written by homeless
Merge written by saartha
Forget written by Crestfallenman
One Time Is Good written by Daniel Barlow
Don't Tell Me You Love Me written by homeless
Untitled - September 19, 2017 written by homeless
Dreamt written by rev.jpfadeproof
Tidal written by OneDarkFlame92
No More Damn Love Poems written by rev.jpfadeproof
I Wonder If written by Wolfwatching
Summer of Peaches written by rev.jpfadeproof
Untitled - 12/12/2017 written by homeless
Fizzy Love written by rev.jpfadeproof
Moon and Me written by rev.jpfadeproof
Untitled: June 24, 2018 written by homeless
Forgetting You written by rev.jpfadeproof
I Believed written by homeless
Variety written by saartha
Exult written by saartha
X written by homeless
Outside the Chain written by Wolfwatching
BlackBerry Bushes written by Daniel Barlow
Hazy Half-Moon written by rev.jpfadeproof
Buried written by MyPeriodical
Two written by homeless

Enter your search terms Submit search form

Web www.eliteskills.com

[ Quick Signup ]
[ Lost Password ]

January 10 07
131,497 Poems
Posted

I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

[ Angst Poetry ]
[ Cutters ]
[ Famous Poetry ]
[ Poetry Scams ]

FontSize:
[ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]

Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3 It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
It means a lot to them, as it does to you.