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    dots Submission Name: A Tale of Two Mindsdots
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    Author: lnzylou
    Elite Ratio:    0.19 - 0/1/4
    Words: 160
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Description:
       This poem was something that I'd written to express my frustrations with my Multiple Personality Disorder.


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    dotsA Tale of Two Mindsdots
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    A tale of two minds is more than a reality,
    It's practically a nightmare...
    emotions are mixed, my minds are a mess and I'm left, putting together a puzzle with missing pieces and mismatched places.
    With emotions uneven, and mentalities separate, I wonder if my puzzle will ever be complete.
    I have hope and the aspiration to succeed in my "whole-comings" but if my emotions won't mix and our personalities won't blend then I can never be whole.
    Then I cannot be the me that I have never known.
    Shard after shard, sliver after sliver I have been reconstructed into this person that I don't even know...
    How sad is that?
    How foreign?
    It's foreign enough that I can't keep up, that I can't even understand the roads that we are being led down.
    I trust my guide, but can I trust myself? This stranger?
    This person that is being built before my eyes, can I trust me?




    Submitted on 2012-03-05 16:31:26     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow! Talk about making the reader think! How often do we all wonder about such things? I can only imagine.

    You have certainly captured aspects of duality. Almost like the classical angel and devil representations...or better yet, the id of our personality.

    I wonder - would you risk what you have written to alter how the text appears? For example...certain lines together, while others are separate. Or for effect, using bold or upper case letters (maybe italics?). Totally your call...

    In any case, nice work!

    Take care,

    K
    | Posted on 2012-03-05 00:00:00 | by krs3332003 | [ Reply to This ]


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