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    dots Submission Name: All that I am feelingdots
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    Author: taintedsmiles
    Elite Ratio:    3.83 - 62/89/71
    Words: 186
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsAll that I am feelingdots
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    And so I sit in this water,
    the faucette dripping on my feet...
    I lay back, slide into emptiness;
    fade into dreamless sleep,
    and sleep...
    But the black behind my eyes-
    has frightened me awake.
    And the quiet, silent whispers
    are more than I can take.
    And it's takes alot for me to rattle,
    takes more than that, to make me shake.
    And I've never felt so brittle,
    too weak to even break.
    But I can scatter;
    fake that i'm ok.
    Fake that it's alright.
    Just hide inside, from this mind of mine;
    pretend to sleep, when you're awake.
    I can not think-
    A pause for breath.
    My shuffling mind
    never stops to rest.
    I am weary, and sick,
    but nothing more than that.
    It was all taken from me-
    Now there's nothing left,
    for you to grab, and steal from me.
    I am used, tattered, ragged - I fray...
    They all worn me out
    so they throw me away,
    and as I lay in the trash-
    staring at the ceiling;
    realization hits me, that I'm not empty:
    just look at all, that I am feeling.




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