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    dots Submission Name: Ma Meredots
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    Author: Realitywarp87
    ASL Info:    25/M/FL
    Elite Ratio:    3.1 - 27/53/63
    Words: 379
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 657
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       You only have one mother...cherish her.


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    dotsMa Meredots
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    Two hearts beat in one body
    Nine months until you're born
    I am my mother's offspring
    The womb from which I'd been torn
    Her arms are a place of shelter
    Her bosom a place to rest
    When she sang, her body echoed
    While my ear pressed to her chest
    She awaits the pitter patter
    Signifying my first steps
    At the sound of my first word
    In an instant she had wept
    Hand in hand we strolled to school
    Suppressing a feeling of dread
    Hoping her son will be kept safe
    As when she'd cradle me to bed
    Through the years when I had fallen
    She was there to raise me up
    Crying on her gentle shoulders
    Kissing away discomforts in a manner so abrupt

    As I grew older, and she grew frail
    I would always drift astray
    Keeping my self in isolation
    While slowly pushing her away
    At dinners there was silence
    Our home was filled with frowns
    She tried to converse in car rides
    But with music, her voice I drown
    Enraged, I curse and yelled at her
    Not caring what I'd say
    With shouting wars, and slamming doors
    I would often run away
    Causing her public humiliation
    Or hanging up while on the phone
    Wishing that I had better parents
    Or awaiting the day I lived alone
    I don't know how it's come to this
    Our bond was torn apart
    She was the one whom I admired
    A half of each others heart

    Now when I look into her eyes
    Sadness is all I see
    From goodnight kisses that went unanswered
    Or hugs that were left empty
    Her soul has, now, gone hollow
    Her mind was left to rust
    From my thoughts that were left unspoken
    Because with her, I could not trust
    It's too late now to mention
    All the words I could convey
    How I long to be beside her
    And how I pray for her each day
    Just one embrace to show
    That my love for her is true
    How much I'm sorry for my actions
    And all the pain that she's been through
    With tears, I look back to the days
    When her face was all I knew
    Knowing that I killed my mother
    By saying one less "I love you"...




    Submitted on 2012-03-07 18:00:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is a very deep and complex poem about your relationship with your mother. Forgiveness. No matter what happens your love for your mother is true and that is all that matters.

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    | Posted on 2012-03-22 00:00:00 | by Wonderwords | [ Reply to This ]


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