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    dots Submission Name: The Inflictiondots
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    Author: concrete_rose
    ASL Info:    31/f/nc
    Elite Ratio:    2.59 - 43/51/34
    Words: 157
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 406
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    Description:
       this poem is so writing that stemmed from a situation that is hard to solve.


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    dotsThe Inflictiondots
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    The infliction’s that are encountered,
    Swell viciously in the belly of this woman,
    About to burst open they are constantly clawing;
    At the walls of personal sanity.

    Oh to be released from the loneliness,
    That drones on daily into weeks,
    Then into months it is flowing,
    Where to be at an end?

    Like a river that flows frequent,
    Ominous of surroundings,
    Confused at the pebbles that blind its way,
    There it is she sits, in that river,
    Watching, waiting for redemption.

    Time is so constant and the waiting is forever,
    Seemingly so distant but not fatal,
    There will be an end to all of this,
    Where to begin?

    Those emotions that are so held inside,
    Swallowing up all the time;
    That would be allowed for peace,
    Will soon break free,
    And the chains will burst into pieces of strength.

    © 2012












    Submitted on 2012-03-08 20:33:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow that is a great interpretation, i appreciate that.
    | Posted on 2012-03-24 00:00:00 | by concrete_rose | [ Reply to This ]
      really taken by the wording in the third stanza...wow...

    and the ending..."chains bursting into pieces of strength"--

    you really turn a phrase well.

    sometimes we are the ones who hold ourselves back...we can't break away from the self-perception that we can't do it...or can't find hapiness...or don't deserve it...we are slaves to our own self-deprication.

    jacob
    | Posted on 2012-03-09 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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