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    dots Submission Name: Wipe-Outdots
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    Author: Bloodstone
    ASL Info:    3.4/ ink/ Asylum empire
    Elite Ratio:    3.31 - 108/138/121
    Words: 103
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 677
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       It's Not safe to Save yourself


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    Breaks you
    I know it breaks you
    Donít hide your infected-skin from wasted-water

    Makes you desecrates you
    Canít even fool yourself

    Pains you hangs you
    Learn to live with ill-consumption

    Hate me now
    As I smile at your pain
    Hate me right
    For doing you so wrong

    Out

    Away

    And beyond

    Over

    Below

    Reduced

    Smile
    I bet you canít

    Cry
    You Canít even stop

    Let yourself air-out die-down

    Well I parade around your suffering




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      Suffering is the way of this world. We eat the pain and shit this life.
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