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    dots Submission Name: ive cleary lost my mind..dots
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    Author: scardnscared
    ASL Info:    25/ DFW
    Elite Ratio:    3.1 - 585/498/311
    Words: 253
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsive cleary lost my mind..dots
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    have you ever seen the sun shine
    or heard a new born baby cry?
    have you ever lost your breath
    or never watch your next step?

    cause i have
    and everytime i see you cry
    its like the first time.

    and how could i forget
    the smell of your skin
    or the taste of your breath.

    you were the center to my universe
    and you would never let me forget
    cause you shined so bright
    that you burned the blue out of my irises.

    we would walk
    hand in hand
    down in the sand
    and we would smile
    show our teeth
    and bite our lips.

    were has the time gone?
    and where are you again?
    i can't forget that first look
    or the last for that matter...

    you jumble up my brain sometimes
    i can't tell whats wrong or right
    and i wish i could go back in time
    but whats the use of things?

    ive gone crazy as you can see
    im wearing my heart out on my sleeve
    screaming up at the sky
    wishing i could be set free.

    watch me as i succumb
    to the fear
    to the pain
    to the thought of never being sane

    think of me and please just smile
    don't be scared because im not there
    just live your life and ill live mine
    and remember

    i was your first and you promised me
    i would be your last.

    but we both know you lied.




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