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    dots Submission Name: The spark of lifedots
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    Author: AbsolutelyLost
    ASL Info:    27/M/India
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 54/41/33
    Words: 108
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Love
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    dotsThe spark of lifedots
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    I tried to keep my heart,
    Between chains and thorns.
    And then you came,
    And broke everything I wove.

    Why did yo have to teach me,
    To break free?

    I was happy,
    In my solitude.

    And then you came,
    And woke me up,
    And rushed the adrenalin.

    You taught me that life,
    Was worth more than what I,
    Had though it to be.

    Then like a dream,
    You vanish,
    Into thin air.

    But vanish or not,
    Your smile remains,
    And the spark in your eyes,
    Draws me closer to life,
    Than my solitude,
    And I wish to be with you,
    Ever after.




    Submitted on 2012-03-10 13:41:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Aww this seems like something i would post .... I know how you feel to live life a strict way inside your "bubble" so to speak and then someone comes along and POPS it... And for whatever reason they do not remain in your life however your life is now forever changed ...

    I only wonder if I can get my bubble back

    Jackz
    | Posted on 2012-03-13 00:00:00 | by jackz | [ Reply to This ]


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