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    dots Submission Name: what if I wanted to leave?dots
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    Author: Dark Dann
    ASL Info:    18/ Male/ San Diego
    Elite Ratio:    6.44 - 78/67/53
    Words: 209
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotswhat if I wanted to leave?dots
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    You say that you care
    You say that you know
    What I'm going through

    But do you?

    Why do we try so hard
    To change how we feel inside?
    Why do we try so hard
    To stay by their side?

    What if I wanted to leave?
    But couldn't for the sake of my heart
    What would you say?

    Can you look into my eyes?
    And tell me what you see!
    Can you look into my eyes
    And show me what to be.

    I tried to change myself
    Over and over again
    Couldn't find another reason to lie
    Even after all this time
    My heart is my reason to survive.

    Cover the scars with a little lies
    And tell me the reason to despise.
    They say hate sinks in deeper
    Inside a broken heart

    What if I wanted to leave?
    But couldn't for the sake of my heart
    What would you say?

    A thousand words doesn't change anything
    But a thousand lies changes everything

    What if I wanted to leave?
    But I was too scared to admit
    That life would be colder
    If I tried to lie
    And pretend I never needed you to survive




    Submitted on 2012-03-10 17:57:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      We try to change for the ones we love to hopefully a) have that feeling returned to us and b) to be accepted by them...or at least thats how i see it.
    | Posted on 2014-08-15 00:00:00 | by Teofila | [ Reply to This ]
      hmph.. i know that sometimes my poetry helps me figure out my real life situations that i am in.. because i can look upon the page,and kinda get that outside perspective that i wouldnt be able to see when im battling it all from the inner point of view,ya know?anyway i could def feel the angst and frustration in this piece,so head up my friend,and keep pickig up the pen! ...crazy
    | Posted on 2012-03-11 00:00:00 | by crazyphreshone | [ Reply to This ]


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