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    dots Submission Name: Let Me Help Youdots
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    Author: DearlyDeparted
    Elite Ratio:    3.33 - 211/290/189
    Words: 86
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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    Description:
       Helping a friend out of the pit of despair..


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    dotsLet Me Help Youdots
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    You look like an idiot.
    Down there on your knees.
    I didn't have it in me before.
    Though I can't take it anymore..
    Seeing you like this.
    A broken toy, the child forgot.
    For some play thing;
    you're surely not.
    So get the fuck on your feet.
    Come dance to this beat.
    A melody that'll leave you in a trance.
    Rythms that feel like new romance.
    Get off the ground.
    I'll show you,....
    there's still good in this world to be found.




    Submitted on 2012-03-11 11:30:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow !!!

    Truly inspirational :))

    Take my hand and show me what good there is,
    I can see that ray,
    But my legs are too frail to go that far away.

    Cheers,
    AbsolutelyLost
    | Posted on 2012-03-16 00:00:00 | by AbsolutelyLost | [ Reply to This ]
      I felt like you could have kept going with this the begining has so much angst and built up feelings you express them by saying "you are not! So get up off your feet" keep going with it i know you have it in ya!!!

    Jackz
    | Posted on 2012-03-13 00:00:00 | by jackz | [ Reply to This ]


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