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    dots Submission Name: Whispering to the Winddots
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    Author: krs3332003
    Elite Ratio:    6.45 - 142/113/63
    Words: 112
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    In these resolute times
    innocence is lost
    hope becomes overwhelmed
    with promises to keep

    But moments of sanity
    are clouded with angst
    and soon fade into tears
    Listen, the world is watching

    Standing on a rainbow
    prayers abound majestically
    The light of all lights
    for the weeping masses

    Let it linger, let it sing
    Implicit trust burning through
    it holds the candle's beam
    Only now is it understood

    From distant hearts of illusion
    bring memories of tomorrow
    Mountains for love to ascend
    for reality beckons no more

    Much simpler to some
    Carried away by feathered wings
    for their price has been paid
    Whispering to the wind




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      Loved the poem. It is a beautiful work depicting the reality of this current world. This poem is full of very impressive and very impactive lines. Kudos to you. Enjoyed your work.
    | Posted on 2016-09-26 00:00:00 | by Ramneet | [ Reply to This ]
      "hope becomes overwhelmed/ with promises to keep"

    those two lines surely fit so many scenarios...but these days the state of the world in general....what have we done to get this messed up...we hear politicians and others speak of hope, of "yes we can"

    but we may as well whisper to the wind...because what we wish for is all blowing away in the wind..."distant hearts of illusion"

    like there were "mountains of love to ascend" once---

    but even they disappeared..

    "reality is gone"

    real has been replaced by disingenuous ---so much fakeness...so much hiding behind facades...

    so much dishonesty...what can we really believe anymore?

    what is the price for believing?

    like this piece
    although you probably meant it to be positive...just the old cynical me coming out.
    jacob
    | Posted on 2012-03-14 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
      I love the lines
    "Hope becomes overwhelmed
    With promises to keep."

    I feel like each stanza is a little blip of consciousness, rather than it being one flowing poem. If it wasn't meant that where, there seems to be something stunting the transition from stanza to stanza.

    It might be the lack of punctuation, which makes it so that I read it it where I want the punctuation to be, or where I assume they will be, and it messes up whatever flow you intended for the poem to have. Each stanza and each line is powerful within itself, but they have a hard time connecting together to form one poem, which makes it seem as if the poem is lacking one clear idea. But based on your description, that's probably what you wanted, more to capture fleeting feelings than a full idea, and if that was your goal, than you succeeded. You have a lot of gem statements here in this piece, and my favorite is of course the one I pointed out. I feel like sort of like it was one of those things where you see many people walking around with candles in honor of someone. I think it's called a Vigil.

    | Posted on 2012-03-11 00:00:00 | by EmpathicAya | [ Reply to This ]
      I love the lines
    "Hope becomes overwhelmed
    With promises to keep."

    I feel like each stanza is a little blip of consciousness, rather than it being one flowing poem. If it wasn't meant that where, there seems to be something stunting the transition from stanza to stanza.

    It might be the lack of punctuation, which makes it so that I read it it where I want the punctuation to be, or where I assume they will be, and it messes up whatever flow you intended for the poem to have. Each stanza and each line is powerful within itself, but they have a hard time connecting together to form one poem, which makes it seem as if the poem is lacking one clear idea. But based on your description, that's probably what you wanted, more to capture fleeting feelings than a full idea, and if that was your goal, than you succeeded. You have a lot of gem statements here in this piece, and my favorite is of course the one I pointed out. I feel like sort of like it was one of those things where you see many people walking around with candles in honor of someone. I think it's called a Vigil.

    | Posted on 2012-03-11 00:00:00 | by EmpathicAya | [ Reply to This ]


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