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    Author: thesunbird
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 198/19/19
    Words: 40
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    & still the thought:

    wonder passes over the lungs -
    what knew the surface
    of my blood

    and moved, in turn, from
    partition -
    to partition.

    i make one breath - give it to you.




    Submitted on 2012-03-12 08:00:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Short yet I'm loving its simplicity. On the second line "what knew the surface" isn't it supposed to be "that"..just a thought.
    I really love the repitition at near end,works well.

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    | Posted on 2012-09-14 00:00:00 | by jeniecel | [ Reply to This ]
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