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    dots Submission Name: Broken dreamsdots
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    Author: AbsolutelyLost
    ASL Info:    27/M/India
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 54/41/33
    Words: 58
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsBroken dreamsdots
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    I dreamed of life with happiness,
    And not a clue of bitterness.

    I wished to walk amidst dense forests,
    By the lake beside her highness.

    I wished to make love,
    And get entrapped within her cove.

    But dream of mine became dismay,
    And there is no ray,
    Nor is her sway,
    In my stupid way.




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