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    Author: Latin King
    ASL Info:    31/M/Los Angeles
    Elite Ratio:    2.39 - 104/232/145
    Words: 76
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 666
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 515



    Description:
       It's raining, inspired by the few drops we now get in the city of Los Angeles. Enjoy!


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    dotsTemporary Frienddots
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    Like they always say,
    Nothing really lasts forever
    Like the many days that go by
    And the feeling of mortality,
    When the flesh severs.

    My money bought me so many,
    Friends I mean I had plenty
    Paid for their company
    Like if I had a sign that read,
    Rent Me!

    And just like I base friendship
    As fictitious like fairies,
    I enjoy it to the fullest
    Like the rain,
    That's temporary.






    Submitted on 2012-03-17 10:33:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I absolutely love this! The flow is perfect, the wording is to the point. I don't know what else to say I just really enjoyed this poem. Thanks for sharing!
    | Posted on 2012-03-17 00:00:00 | by metallichick786 | [ Reply to This ]


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