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On a Bended Note


Author: Blue Monk
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Just started lessons.


On a Bended Note



Somewhere in-between I seek
on a bended note
that certain cry of angel's tongue
by way of six-string strung




Submitted on 2012-03-17 11:19:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Another great poem about the creative process. I like the spiritual connections and how the process itself can lead to a kind of transcendent experience by the narrator's estimation. Very nice.
| Posted on 2015-04-24 00:00:00 | by emwren | [ Reply to This ]
  Brilliance abound!!!

I want to learn myself. I recently received a flute as a gift, which is nice but my fingers and wrists (as well as my interest ) will not allow enjoyment. So trade it in I will and get me an acoustic. A tiny bit ungrateful maybe but money well spent is one of my mottos these days.

I am a minimalist at heart so this strikes a cord with me..pun not intended but played none the less. I always find it thrilling to have so much clearing and emotion in so few words. My shortest piece ever is two lines...I was never able to add anything to it as it was simply destine to be complete as is. Funny, I think received more comments then any others lol
Maybe that was a hint of some kind ya think?

Anyhoo
This is a keeper...yep

Peace
| Posted on 2014-05-16 00:00:00 | by clay | [ Reply to This ]
  Brilliant!

strung tongue and bended note...

...somehow, the sum of form and letters captures the soul of 'Little Wing'..
(the SRV version)
...and turns it lyrical.

That's one helluva translation.


Brilliant! An instant favorite.
| Posted on 2012-03-18 00:00:00 | by latentlylyrical | [ Reply to This ]
  hmm. . . my dad plays a 1967 Fender Bass. I preferred unplugging the guitar and hooking up a mic to his huge amp and singing off key solos in the family room, though.

Still, this is fun stuff. I agree with Jacob. It is very clever and sticks in the mind. And of course, I have a special affinity for any reference to seeking the song/tongue of an angel. Yes, very nice stuff.

Jane

| Posted on 2012-03-18 00:00:00 | by JanePlane | [ Reply to This ]
  i love the "tongue" "strung" strum of the rhyme---

and pic or no pic this creates a short melody that will stick in my mind...

i like "on bended note" and the play on "on bended knee"
this poem really works for me--

searching for that in-between...there is much in between the lines of life.

jacob
| Posted on 2012-03-17 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
  I can relate to that. I've been playing since I was 13. Great hobby. Like get down.

Bruce
| Posted on 2012-03-17 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]


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