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    Author: Glen Bowman
    ASL Info:    70 m Oz
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 1140/307/186
    Words: 73
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/
    Total Views: 558
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 529



    Description:
       I like making poems that compare evolution with creation myths. It's supposed to be funny, but basically this topic gives me the cold shivers. Too big.


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    Sinuous traces whispering:
    "Eat it, know ..."

    With a jewel in its head?
    Your tail in its teeth:
    only another old tale
    by wild folk
    about untamed law

    ... that the star burns,
    that the souls grow,
    that their truths and lies
    have descendants
    if they can.

    Complex mathematics muttering:
    "Measure! Know!"
    A new voice? Never.
    But spoken in forks
    of a new, weird tree.




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      I have to say you are good at using words. A trait I was once good with. I mean I always though I was at least the imagery part. I mean I could always find the words to describe pain. Love, especially, has always been hard for me to describe. I feel there is a lot to learn from you. Don't mind my curiosity for I do not like to read many others poetry.

    As to the piece the transitioning from line to line and metaphor to metaphor is nice. I like poems that rhyme. Not to say the occasional poem without rhyming is nice. I've always been one to stick to my guns I guess. Though at times when I write I find myself having that one poem that has no hope in rhyming at all, or that ever so persistent good line that sticks out. Which either does not fit in the stanza, does not rhyme, or possibly both.

    I also like the topic of the poem, depth, and general flow, even though it does not rhyme. Though it did not it still read very nicely and easily. Almost fluently.

    I did find it off that there was not more detail to the piece. It seems a bit simple, when I know you could shoot for greater.

    -Mike

    | Posted on 2013-10-02 00:00:00 | by siroez | [ Reply to This ]
      Quite compelling. This is apparently where minds that seek meaning and truth look and listen and ultimately evolve, bit by bit towards one thing or another.

    Some feel that mathematics tell us truth, but in truth it is only a language by which we describe observed relationships - if this, then that (at least as far as we can currently tell). What it does not say is how much we have yet to observe, yet to even consider. At such time as existing mathematics fall short (as it always will), we invent some new mathematics in an attempt to "solve" things. Another, higher fork in the tree perhaps? But always... there is more, much more.

    On the other hand, is the shortcut of going right to the source of all things a valid one? Does "it" meet us half way or even deliver the goods directly to some of us at prescribed times? Religion implies mystical origins but also implies control of what is allowed to be known, by whom as well as when. Plus, if an active agent exists which can prevent us from any direct knowledge even as to it's own actual existence, is there a purpose to that?

    Perhaps "too big" is by design, since many don't yet have the teeth to chew same without choking.
    | Posted on 2012-03-21 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]


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