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    dots Submission Name: Paintdots
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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/378
    Words: 186
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Longing
    Total Views: 393
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    Bytes: 1253



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       uhggg no one has any idea and although i will always keep it that way... i wonder how others who personally know me would act with information you read in my posts about me.


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    dotsPaintdots
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    You think you know me
    They think they know me
    No one has the slightest clue and I wish to keep it that way

    Be sure to paint the smile on in the morning
    Rummage around for a happy pill or two
    Push all my emotional pain to the back of my mind
    *Deep Breath*
    Its time to begin my day..

    Ignore those unconscious reminders of the sexual abuse
    .iIf this can be accomplish the rest becomes easier to forget..

    The back pain I feel due to the trigger I pulled on that 12 gauge shot gun
    PULL down those long sleeves!
    Cover up my past drug addiction, which took its toll on my veins
    Missing my mother even if she did let him touch me..

    Burry it all as far back into my mind,
    And I'll keep going, for its all I have ever done..
    For reasons unknown to even myself

    I continue to struggle, yet I can always rely on painting whatever expression you wish to see...




    Submitted on 2012-03-20 21:23:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      the happy pills, the painted smiles...

    reminds me of an old bobby goldsboro song.."see the funny little clown, see him laughing as you walk by"

    but inside he's crying.

    we have one face that is real, then often another face we paint for others...

    i like "pulling down the long sleeves"

    tough to always have to paint ourselves into that corner.

    jacob
    | Posted on 2012-03-20 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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