Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: Miss Spencedots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: Kalidoscopeeyes
    ASL Info:    18/f
    Elite Ratio:    3.64 - 122/151/29
    Words: 48
    Class/Type: Misc/Serious
    Total Views: 1027
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 300



    Description:
       This is a sort of ode to one of my past teachers. I thought she was one of the greatest teachers in the world because she got me interested. But everyone else was too ignorant and caught up in themselves that they didn't notice the amazing oppurtunity she was giving them to learn.



    I think this needs to be longer.


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsMiss Spencedots
    -------------------------------------------


    Her voice pierces the stale air
    Thirty heads snap up from daydreams;
    All in the same room, but millions of worlds apart.
    She's beginning to sound like a broken record
    And the blank stares in return are evidence
    That her worse fears are no longer just a threat.




    Submitted on 2004-08-01 22:39:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||
      i liked this. funny how you explained every teacher i've ever had in such a short piece. i liked it.
    ps - thanks for commenting on my work. i appreciate it. i know my spelling reeks like an old shoe, but i try. lol, thanks again.
    | Posted on 2004-08-07 00:00:00 | by Celeste J. Bell | [ Reply to This ]
      Never actually HAD Ms. Spence. Yeah i HATED geometry b/c no one would shut the hell up during class so we could learn something...although Ms. Richardson wasn't exactly a great teacher...write more on this topic b/c i think we both feel the same way. You write a lot about school. Do you miss it? har har if ya do.
    | Posted on 2004-08-02 00:00:00 | by Astarael | [ Reply to This ]
      I like the beginning of this piece, and i say beginning because i agree with you that i think it should be longer, you've outlined how the others differed in their view, and how she would fear to be ignored, to not be able to make that difference, but how did she touch you?
    | Posted on 2004-08-01 00:00:00 | by Transcendancing | [ Reply to This ]


    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?



    19467

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.


    Google
     


    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry