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    dots Submission Name: Things I've Seendots
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    Author: Latin King
    ASL Info:    31/M/Los Angeles
    Elite Ratio:    2.39 - 104/232/145
    Words: 83
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 666
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    Description:
       Recalling things I've seen in my lifetime!


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    dotsThings I've Seendots
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    I've witnessed murder
    First hand,
    Witnessed kidnapping,
    Faint utters,
    and cries From grown man.

    Witnessed my Dad
    Beat on my Mom,
    Have had
    Storms with no end,
    There was never a calm.

    Witnessed my son's birth
    Also faced my worse fears,
    Though I say it and it hurts
    I'm a living proof that there
    Hasn't been no justice here.

    And yet my mind state
    Is that of a Marine
    Amazed at all the craziness,
    Of all the things I've seen!




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      i have been a Soldiers daughter, sister and wife i know how difficult things can be. this makes me think of my brother who after 4 tours suffers from PTSD.... this really brings light to things for people. thank you for letting me into your world
    | Posted on 2012-05-17 00:00:00 | by sweet sorenity | [ Reply to This ]
      A good write, and you have given others a glimpse of what a harsh and dangerous environment is like...

    | Posted on 2012-04-03 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      It is a very pathetic life situation. You have seen the worst and all the ugliness in life. You had the courage to pen it down and it definitely alleviates the despair.
    | Posted on 2012-03-29 00:00:00 | by Ramneet | [ Reply to This ]


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