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    dots Submission Name: Waiting Sicknessdots
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    Author: HisNameIsNoMore
    ASL Info:    28 - Male - Ohio
    Elite Ratio:    3.08 - 75/182/217
    Words: 109
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 553
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 888



    Description:
       It eats away at us. It comes to define us. Memories, moments and those who we've left behind. Some just leave while others die. Yet we just wait, wait forever- our forever, wallowing in sickness. Degrading the heart, mind and soul... Until what? We wither away-


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    "Hello."

    That voice spoke, once upon a time ago.
    Soft; compassionate, purged of ego.
    I smiled.

    "Rain."

    Splashing; mixing with the dirt on my face.
    Grimy gray smears working on staining the soul.
    I stared.

    "Hello?"

    Eyes reflecting only the absence.
    They said the edge would feel like this.
    Helpless.

    "Hurry."

    Never laugh as a hearse drives by.
    Caught, shocked in the presence of it all.
    I frowned.

    "Hello..."

    It was time to go- Always to remain in gold.
    Turning away, and growing old.
    Alone.

    "Goodbye."

    Silence waited in patience, departing with solitude.
    Forever in love-
    I hope.




    Submitted on 2012-03-23 11:34:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow, this is so sad....it moved me and reminded me of my best friend who died back in 1984...i was a pallbearer at her funeral.

    taken too soon, she was 27....beautiful woman inside and out.

    this took me down that road...and touched me deeply.

    jacob
    | Posted on 2012-03-23 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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