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    dots Submission Name: Lovedots
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    Author: delfina
    Elite Ratio:    1.62 - 0/0/1
    Words: 98
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    A young girl sat on a doorstep with her face in her hands. Tears were streaming down her face, and she was gasping for air. A young man watched her as he walked by. He stopped next to her and asked her what was wrong.
    "Go away!", she replied.
    The girl revealed her face as the man began to leave. There were bruises underneath her eyes.
    The boy stared in wonder.
    The girl got up to go back inside and the boy grabbed her arm and gently touched her face, being careful to not harm her anymore...




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