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    dots Submission Name: tracing shadowsdots

    Author: trinityfinger
    Elite Ratio:    3.53 - 136/344/209
    Words: 236
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotstracing shadowsdots

    to my hands

    you trace smiles and promises
    of weekends spent, climbing

    dreamcatchers embedded in walls
    labelled forgiveness and hope.

    i stand to one side, giving what
    semblance of home still resides

    in my patchwork pavement
    journal life.


    this is all poetry and desire and the call
    to roost in trees, oblivious and carefree

    making you spin and blaze and
    furrow your shoulders

    as if this was your one and only chance
    to relieve atlas of his burden.


    we dream of forgetting loss, of praying to comets,
    not gods. they'll at least come visit us in the skies

    our necks craning for that split second it takes
    to make a wish, to hear flutes and sparrows

    and curtained auroras coming to rest
    like haloes above our heads.


    we are no angels. we smirk and snicker at gossip
    our ears should never have pricked up to hear.

    we are tears drying. we scrape for whatever reason
    to make these days go faster or slower, to end

    in joyful sighs.


    to my hands, you trace sorrow in silence.
    you make me dream, you show me hope

    you tell me there is room
    to love.

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      nicely done .. really very good work. usually i get distracted while reading longer poems, but this one took me away right with its own depth and flow. i loved reading it. good job. thumbs up
    | Posted on 2012-04-04 00:00:00 | by Iram | [ Reply to This ]
    This is beautiful Jase; you write beautifully. Need I say more?

    Well, maybe hello. I hope life's treating you well. Oh, and these lines, while the whole poem mesmerized me, absolutely floored me:

    "we dream of forgetting loss, of praying to comets,
    not gods. they'll at least come visit us in the skies"

    | Posted on 2012-04-03 00:00:00 | by Lady of Shalott | [ Reply to This ]
      Your work is so lovely. I often read it and spiral into a deep depression about my own inadequate attempts to make "art". LOL. No. Your work is so lovely I forget about everything else when I read it. I am in your moment and I revel in being there. I think I would fave every one of your pieces if it wouldn't make me look like a creepy stalker. But really, you're just that good. Sorry I don't have more to say. No dazzling input. Not just now anyway. Just enjoying being back on ES for the first time in quite some time . . . enjoying reading and being transported.
    | Posted on 2012-04-03 00:00:00 | by JanePlane | [ Reply to This ]
      at least comets come to visit us...yes, maybe we pray too high...something or someone more accessible might allow us to love.

    we wish for it...we are no angels..."we smirk and snicker at gossip"---"we are tears drying"

    we are hope...we hear there is hope. we hope it is there.

    there is room to love!

    hopefully the gossip is met by joyful sighs...

    i am in a situation of hoping and wishing the days would go by faster..long distance relationships will do that to you.

    where is that star that is close by...will we ever touch it?

    | Posted on 2012-03-24 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]

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