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    dots Submission Name: "If I Could"dots
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    Author: Ron Cole
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    Words: 97
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    If I could I'd pick some stars
    and arrange them in your room,
    And I'd dress the sun to always shine
    through darkness and the gloom.

    I'd have the forest creatures curtsy
    if they passed your way,
    and tall trees bow, and flowers bloom
    to brighten up your day,

    I'd sprinkle stardust
    in your path,
    and have moonbeams
    light your way.

    The birds would sing your favorite songs
    cause I told them that they should,
    and when you slept,
    I'd have angels bless
    your slumber,
    if I could.





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      Isn't it lucky to know anybody who deserves such a serenade?

    It made me think of my daughters, who started off perfect and then had sons. I never even tried to write about how I feel to them people, not yet anyway, but it would have to sound a bit like your poem here!

    You encourage me.
    | Posted on 2012-07-03 00:00:00 | by Glen Bowman | [ Reply to This ]
      Beautifully written RON, a dream for the ages.
    | Posted on 2012-06-06 00:00:00 | by DUSTYTU | [ Reply to This ]
      Reading this made me smile. It was a very smooth read, and I think, puts the reader exactly in the same mind frame as the speaker would want. Thank you for sharing.
    | Posted on 2012-05-28 00:00:00 | by isis_lenore | [ Reply to This ]
      That was such a great happy poem! This made my day! Your words akways seem to brighten up my day.Thanks Ron!

    Hope your week is good and I will see more of you!
    | Posted on 2012-05-22 00:00:00 | by janekostman09 | [ Reply to This ]
      That was sweet!
    | Posted on 2012-03-27 00:00:00 | by PrettyHeart | [ Reply to This ]
      Hi Ron, this was a great poem. I'm sure for someone special in you life. Desi
    | Posted on 2012-03-25 00:00:00 | by Desi | [ Reply to This ]
      i am always blown away by the ease of phrasing and beautiful rhythms of your love poems...

    this is incredibly touching.

    and i rarely like rhyming poems...but when its this natural and unforced, it is irresistable.

    jacob
    | Posted on 2012-03-25 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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