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Author: RequiemOfDreams
ASL Info:    20/M/NJ
Elite Ratio:    3.5 - 97 /140 /38
Words: 48
Class/Type: Poetry /Venting
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Was annoyed at some arrogant guy and decided to write something. It came out bad- I didn't put too much time into. I didn't feel this one well while it was being made.


Quit your whining, you're bad at writing
Those lines are wrong, thats not a word
Your format is bad, mine is strong
Thats so not true; completely unoriginal
Mine is unique- defines perfection
Quit your whining, Cause I'm the best
I'm the better, the best of the rest

Submitted on 2004-08-01 23:06:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  interesting topic...i guess you have to change the ending 'cause it's common..this poem is simple and easy to understand...nothing much to thin k of...but i really like the topic..very unique! cool!
| Posted on 2004-08-01 00:00:00 | by jeniecel | [ Reply to This ]
  hey you talking about me? it's an acurate description if you are. but nice work. seems a little strange that in a poem you say how great you are and in the description you bash your own work. think posative. it doesnt quite 'define perfection' but its pretty good. i agreewith jan the the ending could use work but other than thats if fine
| Posted on 2004-08-01 00:00:00 | by nameless_nobody | [ Reply to This ]
  *giggle* There's nought to bash, its cute in its egotistical spiel, and you can't help but like it. Today on a Monday, the fact that it is about very little, impresses me - no deep philosophical thoughts for today, just simple amusement. Nicely done.
| Posted on 2004-08-01 00:00:00 | by Transcendancing | [ Reply to This ]
  It's ok but i agree, it could be better, maybe change the ending a bit and the second to last line, it seemed a little choppy, (The flow) but i like the repetition part of the line
Quit your whining
maybe you could put something together with that. Repitition might go well for this poem. I liked it anyways and i hope you check out some of my work and tell me what you think.
| Posted on 2004-08-01 00:00:00 | by Jan | [ Reply to This ]

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